Screenplay

Was brainstorming yesterday trying to incorporate all the story plots that have to be input in the film. Namely brains over brawn, and that Machos downfall should come about by his own hand and he should become trapped or embarrised but remain unbroken.
Then for some reason i got the introduction of the Amazing Bobinski in Coraline, where you see him stretching out ontop of the house (laus, ouva, trey, getil!) And i just wanted to get Macho somewhere in the film doing something similar. That spawned the idea of Macho working out infront of her and i knocked out this new screenplay in about 20 mins.

A football bounces across the screen and in front of some reeds and disappears off to the side. The reeds shift slightly and hero steps out from between the looking tired having just woken up. Stretching he lets out a big yawn and looks across the pond lovingly at Girl gnome who is stood upon a pile of stones haloed by the morning light.
Hero plucks a Daffodil from a nearby flowerbed, smartens himself up and starts making his way over to her.
As he gets closer the sound of someone counting off reaches his ears and he slows, peering round a large leaf he sees Macho stretching infront of Girl. Macho looks over his shoulder to make sure she is looking(which she obviously is because she can’t move), then reaches down and picks up a nearby rock and starts bench pressing with it. Hero ducks back behind his leaf and ponders for a second before getting an idea.

Macho is happily bench pressing his rock, showing off, when Hero sidles up next to him looking intrigued. Macho although distracted does his best to ignore Hero. Hero makes a noise of disinterest and wanders off to the side. Macho annoyed at having his weight lifting dismissed so lightly sets the rock down and picks up a bigger one and starts lifting that. Hero walks back and makes a noise of mild surprise before walking off again, Macho is aghast at having his efforts once again put down by Hero so sets the bigger rocks down and picks up a garden fork and starts lifting that, struggling under the weight a little but achieving it. Macho looks to see if girl is looking and see’s Hero leaning against her nonchantly watching him. Hero looks at Macho the at Girl then back at Macho then shakes his head.

Macho throws the fork down and looks around desperately for something bigger to lift. He settles on a large flower pot with a large sunflower in it. He gets his fingers under the edge and starts lifting slowly putting all of his strength into it. Slowly it starts to raise then lifts faster and faster until he has the whole thing above his head. Gasping for breath Macho lets out a little laugh of exhilaration and looks across at Hero and Girl.

Hero seems impressed and wanders closer staring up at the large weight perched on Macho’s shoulders, before Hero smiles coyly. He reaches down and picks up a small pebble off the ground, biting his tongue he concentrates and throws the stone which lands ontop of the flowerpot.

Unable to handle the added (although small) weight Macho’s shoulders start shaking before he falls to one knee. Then with an almighty crash the Flowerpot falls to the ground, Macho disappearing underneath it.

Hero pleased to have gotten rid of the competition happily skips up to Girl. He closes his eyes and slowly leans in to claim his kiss. Suddenly the football flies onto screen and smashes Girl into hundreds of pieces.CreditsMacho lifts the flowerpot off the ground and crawls out from underneath it, resting on the grass out of breath he looks up to see Hero (glue in hand) proudly looking over a badly remade Girl. Hero leans in for a kiss and a part falls off her.

Will show it tommorow and get some feedback.